Question

假设你是李华, 因家庭贫困, 就读高中以来一直受到美国友人Carter先生的热心资助。新年来临之际, 请给远在美国的Carter先生写一封信, 信中包括：

1.问候Carter先生并表达感激之情；

2.介绍自己高三以来的学习生活情况以及新年的打算；

3.祝福Carter先生, 希望他能来中国。

注意：

1.词数120~150；

2.开头和结尾已给出, 不计入总词数。

　Mr. Carter,

How I miss you and your family! Stepping into the New Year, I’m writing to______________________

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

Mr. Carter,

How I miss you and your family! Stepping into the New Year, I’m writing to express my thanks and share with you my school life and my New Year resolution.

  But for your generous help, I couldn’t enjoy a wonderful school life now. I’m on good terms with the teachers and my fellow classmates here. Also, I am getting along well with my study. Actually, I’m making progress. Ever since Senior Three, I’ve been working harder. My goal is to major in physics, which I’m always fascinated with, so I will spare no effort to be admitted into my dream university in the New Year. I want to pass your kindness on by devoting myself to the world of science.

  Words seem to fail me every time I try to express my thanks to you , and I’ll keep my promise and not let you down. Please be my guest anytime at your convenience. Wish you and your family good health and lots of happiness in the New Year!

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：题目是常见的书信作文，要求写一封感谢信，向美国友人Carter先生表达谢意。写作要点已经给出，写作时必须全部包含在内。首先向Carter先生表达感激之情；接着向他介绍自己的学习情况和新年的打算；最后祝福Carter先生并邀请他来中国。用第一人称进行写作，注意书信格式要正确；注意单词拼写、标点、语法的正确使用。

亮点分析：范文使用了很多短语，像：on good terms with；getting along well with；making progress；spare no effort to；pass...on；devoting myself to；keep my promise；be admitted into；let you down；try to；at your convenience等，使作文显得充实；

范文使用了一些重要的语法知识，像：虚拟语气But for...；非限制性定语从句which I’m always fascinated with；时间状语从句every time；不定式作表语My goal is to major in physics；wish后跟宾补Wish you good health等，显示了较强的语法功底；

范文注意使用Also, Actually等来衔接前后句与上下文，使作文比较连贯、流畅。

考点：书信类作文