Question

6．假如你是李明，最近，你的朋友张华因考试不利，情绪低落，学习消极应付．请你用英语给他写一封e-mail，指出其消极行为可能带来的不良后果，并结合自身实际，提出应采取的积极态度和应对方法，鼓励他努力学习．
词数：100左右．
Dear Zhang Hua，
I'm sorry to hear that …
      ．
Yours truly，
Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，给朋友张华写一封e-mail．指出其情绪低落，学习消极应付的消极行为可能带来不良后果，并提出应采取的积极态度和应对方法，鼓励他努力学习．
写作时人称以第一和第二人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．
写作要点：1．开头-问候； 2．告知比赛相关事宜：比赛时间；报名时间；报名地点；参赛内容；获奖办法；3．结尾．
重要短语：do well in（做得好），try one's best （尽某人最大的努力），end up with a failure（以失败而告终），tend to do （有做某事的倾向），lose one's confidence（失去信心），be left far behind（被落下），in face of（面临），calme down（镇定，冷静），ask sb for advice（向某人寻求帮助），stick to（坚持），step by step（逐步地），be of some help to sb（对某人有帮助）．
【高分句型一】
1．You are not the only one who seems to try his best but end up with a failure in exams．
此处是由关系代词"who"引导的定语从句，先行词为"the only one"，关系代词"who"在定语从句中做主语．
【高分句型二】
2．In face of failure，①what we need to do is ②to calme down and reflect our learning methods and make some possible changes or to ask the teachers for advice．
①此处是由"what"引导的主语从句，"what"在主语从句中作"宾语"．
②此处是由"and"连接的几个并列的不定式作表语．
【高分句型三】
3．Only by sticking to studying persistently can we make progress step by step till success．
此处是部分倒装结构，结构为"Only+【状语成分：介词短语/when、if引导的从句/时间副词】+一般疑问句形式"．

解答 Dear Zhang Hua，
I'm sorry to hear that you didn't do well in your last exam．You are not the only one who
seems to try his best but end up with a failure in exams．【高分句型一】Quite a number of students feel the same way as you and they tend to lose their confidence and don't want to study hard any longer．I'm sure you know that it's unwise to do so because you might be left far behind．（消极行为可能带来不良后果）
   I was once in the same situation as yours．Failure is the mother of success．In face of failure，what we need to do is to calme down and reflect our learning methods and make some possible changes or to ask the teachers for advice．【高分句型二】（应采取的积极态度和应对方法）
Anyway，Rome is not built a day．Only by sticking to studying persistently can we make progress step by step till success．【高分句型三】I truly hope I can be of some help to you．（结尾）

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意内容是否包含了所有要点．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．