Question

假如你是高三学生黎明，代表高三学生在毕业典礼上进行毕业演讲。

请根据以下要点写一篇英语短文，内容包括。

 (1)对获得的帮助表示感谢：  (2)消除与同学之间的误会：  (3)努力学习，实现人生

梦想：(4)对学弟、学妹的建议。

注意：(l)可适当加入细节，以使行文连贯：  (2)词数：100左右（开头己给出，不计

入总词数）。

Hello, everybody

    I am greatly honored to be here, representing all of my fellow senior three classmates to

give a speech.

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Answer 1

【答案】

 

Hello, everybody

    I am greatly honored to be here, representing all of my fellow senior three classmates to give a speech.

    Now, I have much to share with my fellow students. Firstly, I would like to show my appreciation to those standing by me all the way, teachers and friends included. Without their help and advice my life would be different. Secondly, it’s high time to say sorry to classmates whom I hurt or misunderstood. Communication and smiles act as bridges to friendship. Thirdly, I have made up my mind to make every effort to study, for I believe hard work is the key to success. Just as the old saying goes, “no pains, no gains”. Finally, I hope that all the younger fellows can make full use of time, because time and tide wait for no men.

【解析】

试题分析：这是一篇演讲稿，属于提纲类作文。人称应使用第一人称。时态用一般现在时。文章首句已写好，文中给出的要点比较具体,故需要准确表达.可以用一些表示并列的词或递进的词进行连接。如：First of all，Secondly， What’s more等词。其中“(4)对学弟、学妹的建议”部分，需要自己发挥，写出一、二点建议即可。属于半开放型作文。同样可用一些词进行层次连接注意演讲稿的格式及称呼语，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，特别注意在选择句式时要赋予变化。

考点：考查提纲类作文。

【亮点说明】(1)使用一些如Firstly，Secondly，thirdly ，finally等承接词进行连接,层次清晰。(2)使用了一些高级句型，如it’s high time to。。。，及虚拟语气的运用Without their help and advice my life would be different.(3)谚语、名言的运用，如：as the old saying goes, “no pains, no gains”,”time and tide wait for no men”(4)高级词汇及短语的使用，如make up one’s mind,make every effort，make full use of 等.