Question

A young man was slapped in the face until he bled because he didn’t offer his seat to a woman with a baby on a bus in downtown Hangzhou. Later he was proved to be a disabled person.
In a series of cases nationwide, we see people being beaten for refusing to give up their seats on public transport, which seems to be a moral problem about correct behavior and self-sacrifice.
People with morals (who don’t give up their seats to deserving people) can be condemned, but they don’t deserve to be treated with violence because they offend moral values and not laws. In comparison, the attackers behave worse.
The attackers regard relying on violence as their only choice if people ignore their appeals to give up their seats. It seems they start a shout or a fight for the sake of justice, but can they still think of their personal intention when they call violence justice?
This “violent justice” can confuse many people and encourage them to do the same, especially when we are overpowered by illogical mood.
If cruel and rude acts are rooted in children’s hearts, society will never step into civilization. The practice violates common values, neither solving problems nor safeguarding civilized society.
[写作内容]
1.以约30个词概括短文的要点。
2.以约120个词谈谈你对这一事件的看法,内容包括:
(1)读完这则新闻,你有什么感受?
(2)假如你是车上的一名乘客,你会怎样做?
(3)就如何创建和谐社会提出你的建议。
[写作要求]
1.你可以使用实例或其他论述方法支持你的论点,也可以参照阅读材料的内容,但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子。
2.作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
[评分标准]
概括准确,语言规范,内容合适,篇章连贯。
 
 
 
 

Answer 1

The news is about a young disabled man who was slapped on a bus for not offering his seat to a woman with a baby, which leads to a debate about who is right and who is wrong.
I am so upset that in our society the woman with a baby should be so impolite. It was wrong of her to get her justice with violence, which really will do great harm to our society.
Today in our society，many other people would take it for granted that they should be offered a seat on the crowded bus, as the morality requires. However,if I were a passenger on the crowded bus，I would stand out to tell her that the young man is also in need of help because of his disability. So it is still a long way for us to build up a harmonious society. In my opinion, we should fight against the violent justice and try every means to avoid it from happening so as to solve such kind of problems and safeguard our civilized society.

解析试题分析：本书面表达是由“残疾人是否应该给孕妇让座”引出的话题。要点都给了出来。本文题型是考生非常熟悉的正反观点类的议论文，在平时的练习中也有相应的模板。审题时注 意本文使用一般现在时，人称以第三人称为主，发表个人意见时使用第一人称。本文的要点均已给出，考生需要使用合适的连接词把孤立的要点联系成文。如However, so, so as to, and,等。也要使用一些高级的词汇词组如 lead to, do harm to, take it for granted, in need of, build up等以提升文章的档次分。
【亮点说明】：本文中的高级结构还是较多的，如The news is about a young disabled man who was slapped on a bus for not offering his seat to a woman with a baby, which leads to a debate about who is right and who is wrong.中的定语从句。It was wrong of her to get her justice with violence, which really will do great harm to our society.此句运用定语从句。However,if I were a passenger on the crowded bus，I would stand out to tell her that the young man is also in need of help because of his disability.运用虚拟语气。
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