Question

12．据报道十八位复旦大学学生去黄山探险遇险，报警求救．相关部门派出救援队伍前往营救，历尽艰辛救出了学生，但有一位民警不幸牺牲．请就"是否应该鼓励大学生去探险"这个话题谈谈你的看法．
探险：explore or go to unknown places
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Answer 1

分析 写好这类作文要注意几个步骤：1． 认真审题，找准提示语中的关键词或句，确定中心思想．2． 依据关键句，草拟提纲，梳理文章的脉络3． 准确定位人称、时态．注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．4．最后还要认真查验是否有漏写情况，有无拼写错误及标点误用等
高分句型一：
Some people take it for granted that college students should explore the unknown world by exploreing．
一些人们想当然地认为大学生该研究探索未知的世界．
高分句型二：
They can hardly make any new discovery because the world has been explored mostly and is still being explored by scientists．
他们几乎不可能有任何新发现，因为世界已经被仍在探索的科学家探索的差不多了．

解答 When asked about a theme，different people will offer different opinions．Exploreing is no exception．Some people take it for granted that college students should explore the unknown world by exploreing（高分句型一）．However，others hold that it is unnecessary and insignificant to be engaged in any adventure in modern times．
As far as I am concerned，I'm in favor of the second view．The reasons are as follows．
Firstly，there is an element of truth that to transform the world college students should know it first，but it doesn't follow that people need to go adventuring．It is unnecessary for modern people to sail around the world in a small boat single-handed，or pass through the desert of the jungle on foot alone，etc．The reason is that there are hardly any places in the world that have never been discovered．A case in point is that eighteen Fudan University students to explore Mount Huang distress，alarm for help，lead to a placeman died in the Mount Huang in the end．Although theie adventure caused a stir in society，I think it was worthless and insignificant because the wen adventuring only out of curiosity and didn't make any valuable discovery as Columbia did．Therefore，the first view cannot bear much analysis．
In conclusion，in modern times college students need not to adventuring．They can hardly make any new discovery because the world has been explored mostly and is still being explored by scientists（高分句型二）．

点评 这是一篇开放式作文，写作时不要仅仅对要点进行生硬的翻译，而是要添加些内容，使文章看起来更充实，要组成一篇通顺连贯的短文．需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．