Question

【题目】The 6yearold kid watched in silence as the man behind the desk，the headmaster of the school，shook his head more than once to his mother．

Minutes later，mother and son walked slowly out of the school，her right hand holding his little hand，her left holding an umbrella to shield(遮挡) both of them from the sun．“Where are we going now，mother？”asked the kid，looking up at her．“To another school，”was her gentle reply．For some reason，the little kid had not been accepted by the school，and she was taking him to another，to try to get him registered．That was more than 50 years ago．That woman was my mother；that little kid was me．

Fifty years later，the day after my mother had slipped into a coma(昏迷) from a stroke，I sat next to her，holding her hand，stroking it，watching her body heaved up and down as she breathed heavily，as if she was struggling with something．Her eyes were closed，her mouth opened．I whispered softly to her，“Mum，it’s okay．You have given us everything．You can let go now．No need to struggle anymore，Mum．”

A few days later，Mum died．At her bedside，I spent some time just looking at my mother，soaking in the finality of her death．There she was，my mother，motionless and lifeless．I took hold of her still warm but lifeless hand，holding it for the last time，recalling every piece of the precious moment we spent together．

I finally let go of her hand—lifeless，yet having given so much life to so many of us，and placed it next to her body．I found myself saying silently to her the only words that came to my mind，“Goodbye Mum，thank you for everything．”

Thank you，Mother，fornot giving up，so that I could go to school．Thank you for coaching me，for reading to me，for ironing my school uniforms，for combing my hair，for tying my shoe laces，for making sure I had a little handkerchief inside my pocket．．．

Rest in peace，Mother，you are still very much alive in us．Happy Mother’s Day．

写作内容

1．以约30词概括上文的主要内容。

2．以约120词对“母亲对你的爱或者她对你成长的影响”进行议论，内容包括：

(1)描述你的母亲；

(2)简述她对你的影响；

(3)你准备怎样表达对她的感激之情。

写作要求

1．作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。

评分标准

概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

Answer 1

【答案】

The writer expresses his gratitude for his mother’s dedication and endless effort in raising him．In his memory，it is her hand that leads him through various moments in his life．

Like the author，I also appreciate my mother for everything she devotes to bringing me up．My mother is a kind and gentle woman，a math teacher at a middle school．She takes good care of me and offers me the best thing she can afford．

My mother not only sets me a good example in life，but also in work．She often says，“Work while you work，and play while you play．That is the way to be happy．” What a piece of good advice！I will always bear it in mind．

As far as I am concerned，nothing can be compared to Mother’s love to me，and my gratitude to her is beyond words．The only thing I am able to do at present is to work hard and make greater progress in my study，so that I can be her pride one day．

【解析】

试题分析：本文首先以“我”与母亲之间以及母亲对我的影响的一个故事来引出本文写作的主题，写作内容 ：1．以约30词概括上文的主要内容。2．以约120词对“母亲对你的爱或者她对你成长的影响”进行议论，内容包括：(1)描述你的母亲；(2)简述她对你的影响；(3)你准备怎样表达对她的感激之情。写作要求：1．作文中可以使用亲身经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。2．作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称，这是特别值得我们注意的。评分标准：概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯。

【亮点说明】本文内容充实，把题目的要求都写进去了，条理清晰，首先用一两句话对上文的故事进行简单的描述，接下来描述了作者的母亲已经母亲对我的影响，，最后表达对母亲的感激之情。本文一些短语的使用，如In one’s memory/ devote to/ bring up/ set sb a good example/ bear in mind/ As far as I am concerned/ make progress等，给文章增添了不少光彩，充分体现了作者扎实的英语基本功，很好的显示了他平时良好的阅读习惯；同时一些句子的使用，如：强调句it is…that…句型：it is her hand that leads him through various…/not only…but also…句型：My mother not only sets me a good example in life，but also in …/还有句子The only thing I am able to do at present is to … 等，给阅卷老师眼前一亮的感觉，而且也是他们为你加分的重要标准，充分体现了本文的文采。