Question

20．This is a picture of a ballet dancer whose left foot looks shockingly different from the right one．Some even jokes that the left foot represents how elegant ballet dancers look．On the contrary，the right one reveals the nature of those dancers'life．One can hardly imagine how much time and effort have been devoted to endless practice．

写作内容
请根据你对所示图片及文字的理解，写一篇150词左右的文章，要点如下：
1．以约30个词简要描述图片的内容；
2．以约120个词谈谈你的看法，内容包括：
（1）图片给你的启示，并举例说明；
（2）你最想对图片的芭蕾舞者说什么？为什么？
写作要求
1．可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文的句子；
2．作文中不能出现真实的姓名和学校的名称
3．不必写标题
评分标准
内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当．
The dancer's left foot is elegantly wrapped in her ballet shoe tied to the ankle with a silk ribbon．The shoeless right foot，however，looks horribly different．Bruises and scars occupy every inch of her toes．
I can only imagine the untold hardship the dancer must have endured for the endless hours of practice to look so glamorous on the stage．Likewise，behind every seemingly stunning success，there can be failures，disappointments，and embarrassments．When the whole world is crazy for JK Rowling's Harry Potter stories，rarely do people know it was after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out．Nothing is difficult to a willing heart．However，when we admire others'success，we should remember it is not from nowhere．
I have imagined the dancer to be my friend．I will，instead of telling her how awesome her dancing is，ask her to take good care of herself，for health is the real elegance of life．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是读写任务型写作，这类作文可按照三段式模板写：
第一段：概况所给短文要点．
第二段：过渡词引出主题句---阐述理由．
第三段：个人观点．特别要注意第一段的概括．用自己的语言概括，不能照搬照抄原文．时态用一般现在时．人称用第一人称和第三人称．重要短语：be wrapped in（被包裹起来），be tied to （束缚于），endure the untold hardship （毫无怨言地忍受苦难），look glamorous（看起来迷人），be crazy for （对…疯狂），turn down（拒绝），came out （出版），be awesome（太棒了）．【高分句型】

1．The dancer's left foot is elegantly wrapped inher ballet shoe tied to the ankle with a silk ribbon．这里是过去分词短语tied作her ballet shoe 的后置定语，被修饰的名词her ballet shoe与动词tie存在逻辑上的被动关系．意为"用丝带系在脚踝上的芭蕾舞鞋"．

2．I can only imagine the untold hardship thedancer must have endured for the endless hours of practice to look so glamorouson the stage．这里是定语从句，先行词是the untold hardship，定语从句为"the dancer must have endured for the endless hours of practice"，从句中endure后缺少宾语，省略了关系代词that/which，不定式to look so glamorous on the stage作目的状语．

3．When the whole world is crazy for JK Rowling's Harry Potter stories，rarely do people know it was after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out．Nothing is difficult to a willing heart．
①这里是否定词rarely置于句首，后用部分倒装．句型为"否定词+一般疑问句"．②动词know后的宾语从句中为强调句型"it was after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out"．强调句型的结构为"It is/was+强调部分+that…"，本句中强调介词短语"after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher"．

解答 The dancer's left foot is elegantly wrapped in herballet shoe tied to the ankle with a silk ribbon．【高分句型】The shoeless right foot，however，looks horribly different．Bruises and scars occupy every inch of her toes．（描述图片）
I can only imagine the untold hardship the dancer must have endured forthe endless hours of practice to look so glamorous on the stage．【高分句型】Likewise，behind every seemingly stunning success，there can be failures，disappointments，and embarrassments．When the whole world iscrazy for JK Rowling's Harry Potter stories，rarely do people know it was after the books had been turneddown 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out．【高分句型】Nothing is difficult to a willing heart．However，when we admire others'success，we should remember it is not from nowhere．（启示及举例说明）
I have imagined the dancer to be my friend．I will，instead of telling her how awesome her dancing is，ask her to take good care ofherself，for health is the real elegance of life．（对图片的芭蕾舞者想说的话及原因）

点评 读写任务型写作是将阅读与写作有机结合，要求考生既能读懂文章信息，又要依据要求规范连贯地表达内容，其中准确概括很有挑战且十分重要，根据记叙文、议论文、说明文等不同文体作相应概括，总的来说，遵循以下步骤：确定主题句；寻找关键词；重构主题句；重组支持句．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次，平时需注意积累短语和重要句型．