Question

【题目】假定你是李华，今年六月份将从北京新华中学髙三毕业，打算到美国哥伦比亚大学上学。现在请你根据下面表格的个人信息，用英语写一封信，申请留学。

姓名：李华	性别：女	出生年月：1999年6月
毕业学校：北京新华中学	学业：各门功课优秀
申请院校：美国哥伦比亚大学 (the University of Columbia)	申请专业：计算机科学
兴趣爱好：网络和英语	电子邮箱：lihua99@sina.com

注意：1.信件必须包括以上内容，不能逐句翻译，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

2.词数100左右，开头与结尾已经给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance to further my study in Computer Science in your university.

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m writing in the hope that I can obtain a chance to further my study in Computer Science in your university.

First, please allow me to make a brief introduction of myself. I’m Li Hua, a girl born in June, 1999. I’m graduating from Beijing Xinhua High School this coming June with each course excellent. I have a keen interest in the computer and the Internet. Besides, I have a good command of English. I know that the University of Columbia ranks among the most famous universities in the USA, and that’s the very reason why I’m now applying for furthering my university study in your Computer Science department.

I would appreciate it if you could take the trouble to provide me with some information and send me the necessary application materials. By the way, my email address is lihua99@sina.com.

I’m looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】试题分析：本次作文要求你给美国哥伦比亚大学写一封申请信，内容要点包括：姓名，性别，毕业学校，学业情况，申请院校和兴趣爱好等。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。特别注意在选择句式时要富有变化。要注意书写，认真查验是否有漏写情况等。

写作亮点：本篇条理清楚，要点全面，结构连贯。其句式上的变化既使得文章生动而流畅，也体现了作者驾驭句式的能力。例如：文章运用了定语从句why I’m now applying for furthering my university study in your Computer Science department.以及I would appreciate it if…句式，和have a good command of等词汇。