Question

11．假定你是李华．你的笔友Jane最近因为学业繁重，身体感到不适，严重影响了学习．因此，她发e-mail给你，寻求你的帮助．请你根据以下要点提示予以回复．
写作要点：合理的饮食；2．适度的锻炼；3．充足的睡眠．4…
注意：
1．短文词数不少于100；
2．开头和结尾部分已写好，不计入总词数；
3．可根据情况增减细节，详略得当；
Dear Jane，
I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy and keep attentive in class．Here is my advice．
Dear Jane，
I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy and keep attentive in class．Here is my advice．
First，have three meals a day and never neglect your breakfast．Keep a balanced diet．For example，eat nutritious food like fresh vegetables，fruits，eggs and fish．Second，taking morning exercise every day is a nice choice．As we all know，everyday exercise helps build a strong body．You can do some sports，such as running，walking，or playing ball games to refresh yourself if weather permits．But，remember not to exercise outdoors in a smoggy day．Finally，don't stay up too late to make sure you have a good sleep every night．
If you do accordingly，I believe you'll feel well soon and you can listen to your teacher energetically and attentively．
Best wishes．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
Best wishes．
Yours sincerely
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
句型一：
Second，taking morning exercise every day is a nice choice．每天早上晨练时一个非常好的选择．
句型二：
As we all know，everyday exercise helps build a strong body 众所周知，每天锻炼可以塑造一个强健的体魄．
句型一使用taking morning exercise这一动名词短语充当主语，非谓语的正确使用会使得文章更有亮点．
句型二使用As we all know，这一非限制性定语从句，从句的使用让文章层次感更强，表达更为准确．

解答 Dear Jane，
I'm sorry to hear that you are feeling ill these days．In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy and keep attentive in class．Here is my advice．
       First，have three meals a day and never neglect your breakfast．Keep a balanced diet．For example，eat nutritious food like fresh vegetables，fruits，eggs and fish．Second，taking morning exercise every day is a nice choice．（高分句型一）As we all know，everyday exercise helps build a strong body．（高分句型二）You can do some sports，such as running，walking，or playing ball games to refresh yourself if weather permits．But，remember not to exercise outdoors in a smoggy day．Finally，don't stay up too late to make sure you have a good sleep every night．（提出建议）
     If you do accordingly，I believe you'll feel well soon and you can listen to your teacher energetically and attentively．（给予美好期盼）
     Best wishes．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

点评 提纲类书面表达要求要点明确，规定了考生的表述的思路，该类书面表达在高考中所占比例较大．因此，考生在行文时，必须抓住要点，做到思维清晰灵活，运用适当的语言将要点完好衔接，切忌过度发散思维．