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9．假定你是李华，你的美国朋友Jack因爸爸过度饮酒而感到非常苦恼，就此请你用英语给他写一封邮件．主要内容包括：1．表示安慰；2．给出建议；3．寄予希望．注意：1．词数100左右；2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文流畅；3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数．
Dear Jack，
I'm sorry to hear that your father is addicted to drinking．I can understand how you feel．It must be a big problem for your family，and it may disturb your daily life．（高分句型一）As his son，it's normal for you to give him your concern．However，you shouldn't become upset about it．Certainly，you should try your best in your spare time to help him get rid of drinking little by little．（高分句型二）Meanwhile，you can ask some doctors and experts for more professional help．Making some rules for him to follow is another way you can try．
We know quitting drinking is very difficult，so you should give him time and care．I wish your father could give up drinking with your help and become healthier and happier．（高分句型三）       
Best wishes．I'm looking forward to your reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于提纲类作文，根据提示信息你的美国朋友Jack因爸爸过度饮酒而感到非常苦恼，就此请你用英语给他写一封邮件，写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，明确几个要点：表示安慰；给出建议；寄予希望 2、提纲是文章的总体框架，要在提纲的范围内进行分析、构思和想象．要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照要点所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态．4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了多种表达：is addicted to对…上瘾；However然而；Certainly确实；in your spare time在空闲时间；get rid of祛除，摆脱；Meanwhile同时；give up放弃；look forward to盼望；
It must be a big problem for your family，and it may disturb your daily life．（高分句型一）
Certainly，you should try your best in your spare time to help him get rid of drinking little by little．（高分句型二）
I wish your father could give up drinking with your help and become healthier and happier．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Jack，
      I'm sorry to hear that your father is addicted to drinking．I can understand how you feel．It must be a big problem for your family，and it may disturb your daily life．（高分句型一）As his son，it's normal for you to give him your concern．However，you shouldn't become upset about it．Certainly，you should try your best in your spare time to help him get rid of drinking little by little．（高分句型二）Meanwhile，you can ask some doctors and experts for more professional help．Making some rules for him to follow is another way you can try．
      We know quitting drinking is very difficult，so you should give him time and care．I wish your father could give up drinking with your help and become healthier and happier．（高分句型三）
      Best wishes．I'm looking forward to your reply．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                              Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                              Li Hua

点评 英语写作是一项主观性较强的测试题．它不仅考查学生的写作基础而且还考查学生在写作过程中综合运用语言的能力．在撰写时要注意主谓语一致，时态呼应，用词贴切等．要提高英语写作水平，需要两方面的训练：一是语言基础方面的训练，要有扎实的造句、翻译等基本功，即用词法、句法等知识造出正确无误的句子；二是写作知识和能力 方面的训练以掌握写作方面的基本方法和技巧．