Question

假如你是李华，英国交换生Anna将来你校学习中文并住在你家（幸福路58号）, 请你应她的要求，根据下图介绍你家周边的情况，以便她初步了解在中国的生活。

注意;
1. 词数100左右；
2. 可适当增加细节使行文连贯；
3. 开头和结尾已经给出，不计
入总词数。
Dear Anna,
I am so happy to learn you are coming to study in our school and stay at my home.
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I can’t wait to see you in China.
Yours
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Anna,
I am so happy to learn you are coming to study in our school and stay at my home.
My home is at No.58, Xingfu Road, just opposite a bank. A five-minute walk from my home along Xingfu Road westward will bring you to a crossroads, where Xingfu Road meets Youyi Street. On the southeast corner of the crossroads lies a shopping mall, where you can get everything you need. Walk north for about 300 meters, along Youyi Street, and you’ll see our school on the right. There we will spend most of the daytime. At the east end of Xingfu road stands the new railway station and it’s easy to reach, as a bus stop is just next to my home and No.26 or No.46 bus will directly take you there.
I can’t wait to see you in China.
Yours
Li Hua

试题分析：这是图表类的作文，要求根据地图表达出李华家的地址，因为没有汉语解释，考生只有具有扎实的语言基础知识能够灵活运用语言的交际性、逻辑性和变通性才能组织出一篇优秀的书面表达。图表题不象文字表述题和看图作文题形象直观、要点明了它需要考生通过观察和分析图表提炼要点然后组织表达材料。一篇初步完成的语篇还要经过修改和审阅才能最后定稿。怎样修改一方面平时养成写后复审自校的习惯另一方面还要掌握一些修改自校的方法。比如1、词法、句法有无问题2、要点和细节有无遗漏3、拼写、标点有无错误4、字数是否符合要求等等。
【亮点说明】文章简洁的总结了所给材料，语言规范，内容合适，语篇连贯，句式多变：My home is at No.58, Xingfu Road, just opposite a bank. A five-minute walk from my home along Xingfu Road westward will bring you to a crossroads, where Xingfu Road meets Youyi Street. 这句话用了定语从句，On the southeast corner of the crossroads lies a shopping mall, where you can get everything you need. 这句话用了定语从句和倒装句，Walk north for about 300 meters, along Youyi Street, and you’ll see our school on the right. 这句话用了固定句型， At the east end of Xingfu road stands the new railway station and it’s easy to reach, as a bus stop is just next to my home and No.26 or No.46 bus will directly take you there.这句话也用了倒装句。