Question

13．Directions：Write an English composition according to the instructions given below．
请以老师当众表扬你为话题，用所给的句子为开头，续写一篇英语短文，内容包括：
 1．老师因何事表扬你；   2．你受表扬时的心情；   3．此次经历给你带来的变化．

As a student，I can tell you that there is nothing better than being praised by my teacher before my classmates．The other day，…

注意：续写词数 100个左右．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提纲作文．根据所提供的材料信息，以老师当众表扬你为话题，写一篇英语短文．写作要点包括：1．老师因何事表扬你； 2．你受表扬时的心情； 3．此次经历给你带来的变化．写作时人称以第一和第三人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主．
重要词汇：nothing better than （最好的莫过于…）；recite（背诵）；even though （即使）； set a good example to （为…树立一个好的榜样）；only if（只要…）；make great progress（取得大的进步）；be determined to do（下决心做某事）；make a great difference（有很大差别）
高分句型：1．He said I memorized all the words ①even though I was not good at English，②adding that I set a good example to all of my classmates．
                 ①even though 引导一个让步状语从句；②现在分词短语在句中作状语．
                 2．I came to realize①only if we put our heart into our lessons ②could we make great progress．
                  ①only if we put our heart into our lessons could we make great progress是一个宾语从句，作动词realize的宾语．
                  ②在从句中only if位于句首，句子用倒装，所以情态动词could提前．

解答 As a student，I can tell you that there is nothing better than being praised by my teacher before my classmates．
    The other day，I was praised by my head teacher because I  recited all the words of Unit 3．He said I memorized all the words even though I was not good at English，adding that I set a good example to all of my classmates（高分句型一）．Hearing what he said，I was more than glad with my heart beating wildly．I came to realize only if we put our heart into our lessons could we make great progress（高分句型二）．Meanwhile，I am determined to study harder rather than waste precious time on playing video games or chatting online．
From my own experience，I learn that a few words of praise can make a great difference．

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意要点的提炼要全，关键短语和句型要写对，准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，还要注意人称和时态使用要正确．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次．