Question

1．假如你是李华，你们学校最近开展了创建"平安校园"活动．你们班为  此要组织一次主题班会，请你用英语写一篇发言稿，谈一谈你对创建"平安校园"的一些想法．短文应包括下面的内容．
1．安全意识的重要；
2．运动时要注意安；
3．在校内要注意人身安全；
4．同学之间发生矛盾时，一定要保持冷静、理智．
注意：1．不能逐条翻译；2．词数．100左右；3．文章开头已给出，不计入总词数．
Safety at School
My dear classmates，
There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our life．Recently our school has carried out a program  aimed at making our campus a safe place to stay on．

Answer 1

分析 假如你是李华，你们学校最近开展了创建"平安校园"活动．你们班为此要组织一次主题班会，请你用英语写一篇发言稿，谈一谈你对创建"平安校园"的一些想法．短文应该包括下面的内容：1．安全意识的重要性；2．在校内要注意人身安全；3．运动时要注意安全；4．同学之间发生矛盾时，一定要保持冷静、理智．写作时不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯．要把所提示的点写全，语句通顺，同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系．根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩．注意：1．词数100左右；2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3．文章开头已给出，不计入总词数．
【亮点说明】There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life．there be句型和同位语从句的结合；I consider this as indeed a good practice，which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life，whether when we stay at school or outside it．非限制性定语从句、宾语从句和whether---or引导的让步状语从句完美结合；When we are doing sports，we should attach importance to the safety and avoid being hurt．句中使用了时间状语从句；Furthermore，when we get into trouble with our classmates，we should remain calm and avoid any form of fighting，which may only bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically．时间状语从句和非限制性定语从句在同一句中出现，另外Furthermore的运用也很到位；As far as I'm concerned，I feel all the students and teachers should work hard and creatively to keep the"safety at school"activity in mind．运用了As far as I'm concerned，这样的方式状语从句；Besides，we are supposed to observe the law discipline where we are at any moment．运用了where引导的定语从句．

解答 My dear classmates，
There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life．（高分句型）Recently our school has carried out a program aimed at making our campus a safe place to stay on．
I consider this as indeed a good practice，which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life，whether when we stay at school or outside it．（高分句型） When we are doing sports，we should attach importance to the safety and avoid being hurt．Furthermore，when we get into trouble with our classmates，we should remain calm and avoid any form of fighting，which may only bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically．（高分句型）
As far as I'm concerned，I feel all the students and teachers should work hard and creatively to keep the"safety at school"activity in mind．（高分句型）Besides，we are supposed to observe the law discipline where we are at any moment．（高分句型）

点评 提纲类写作的文章较开放式的文体，比较好写．学生在写作的过程中，首先思路要清晰，要对所表达的句子通顺的说出来，遇到不会的要学会替换所用语，来达到同样的意思．在每一篇作文中，对于表达观点的句子，都要用上起承转合的连词来加强文章的层次感，适当运用俗语，运用平时常用的句式来使文章富有变化，表达地道得体．