Question

7．人人都在渴望幸福，人人都在感受幸福．请用英语写一篇120词左右的短文，描述你体验幸福的一次经历，并谈一谈你对幸福的理解．
                                                                                    
                                                                                     

Answer 1

分析 本文为议论文写作．人称以第三人称为主，时态为一般现在时．写作要点为：一次幸福的体验以及对幸福的理解．
重点短语：shelter…from（遮挡…使免受）；be about to do（即将，正要做某事）；without any hestitation（毫不犹豫）；
                  spring up（出现，涌现）；as long as（只要）；be willing to do（愿意做某事）．
高分句型：1．Without an umbrella to shelter me from the heavy rain，I had to stand still and wait for my father．
                  这里介词短语Without an umbrella to shelter me from the heavy rain用在句子中作状语．
                  2．I was about to rush home when I found that my English teacher，Miss Wang is also waiting for the rain to stop．
                  句子里的时间副词when相当于at that time．
                  3．Seeing Miss Wang walking in the rain with my umbrella，I smiled and a sense of happiness sprung up in my heart．
                  主语i与动词see存在逻辑主谓关系，这里现在分词短语Seeing Miss Wang walking in the rain with my umbrella在句中作状语．
                  4．As a famous saying goes，happiness is only real when shared．
                  恰当运用谚语，提升文章的感染力．

解答 I still remember the night when it was a cold，late afternoon and it was showering． Without an umbrella to shelter me from the heavy rain，I had to stand still and wait for my father．（高分句型一）． After seemly long hours'waiting，my father finally arrived．I was about to rush home when I found that my English teacher，Miss Wang is also waiting for the rain to stop．（高分句型二）．．Without any hestitation，I went to her and gave my umbrella to her．She was surprised and very happy．Seeing Miss Wang walking in the rain with my umbrella，I smiled and a sense of happiness sprung up in my heart..（高分句型三）．
As a famous saying goes，happiness is only real when shared..（高分句型四）． As long as we are willing to share，we'll find happiness everywhere．（个人看法）

点评 做开放类话题书面表达时，首先要审好题，明确一个观点．写作时要注意包含写作要点切不可漏写．在写作写好后要从单词拼写，单复数，时态等角度去逐一审查，整个写作过程中一定要注意书写的认真及规范．平时需要注意积累短语和重要句型，可以根据话题来对短语进行归类，给人提供建议的议论文文体等等，这样在考试的时候才能有备无患，在规定时间内写出较好的文章．