Question

阅读下面的短文，然后按照要求写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
An elephant was standing and picking leaves from a tree. A small fly came，flying and buzzing (嗡嗡叫) near his ear. The elephant waved it away with his long ears. Then the fly came again, and the elephant waved it away once more.
This was repeated several times. Then the elephant asked the fly, “Why are you so restless and noisy? Why can’t you stay for a while in one place? ”
The fly answered, “I am attracted to whatever I see, hear or smell. My five senses pull me constantly in all directions and I cannot resist them．What is your secret? How can you stay so calm and still?”
The elephant stopped eating and said, “My five senses do not rule my attention. Whatever I do, I get involved in it. Now that I am eating, I am completely absorbed in eating. In this way I can enjoy my food and chew it better. I rule and control my attention, and not the other way around. So when you are in charge of your five senses and attention, your mind will become calm too.”
【写作内容】
1、以约30个词概括短文的内容；
2、然后以约120个词就“专注”这一主题发表你的看法，并包括以下要点：
（1）看完故事后的感受及启发；
（2）描述一段你或他人因受太多干扰而使学习、生活或工作受到影响的不愉快经历；
（3）你打算在高二这一年里如何保持专注、专心。
【写作要求】
1、在作文中可以使用自己亲身的经历或虚构的故事，也可以参照阅读材料的内容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2、作文中不能出现真实姓名和学校名称。
【评分标准】
概括准确，语言规范，内容合适，篇章连贯。

Answer 1

An elephant was constantly disturbed by a restless fly, who asked the elephant about the secret of remaining calm. The elephant revealed that calmness would be obtained when one’s senses and attention were focused.
After reading the story, I was inspired by what the elephant said. The ability to focus one’s attention is the key to success. Just like the fly, a person who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired, unable to achieve his success.
This reminds me of what happened when I entered high school as a Senior One student. I was so excited to find that there were various student organizations and after-class activities intended for us students. It seemed that many groups were suitable to me. During the first term, I was attracted whenever there was a notice from a student group. As a result, I didn’t spend enough time on my studies, nor could I settle down on my homework every day. Consequently, I failed in the final exam.
I have learned a lesson from this experience that one should focus on one thing at a time. Becoming a Senior Two student, I intend to set a clear goal for myself first. Then I will give priority to what I will be doing and keep it up, trying to resist the temptation of other events. I am fully aware that only when I have a clear and determined mind can I achieve my goal in the end.

解析试题分析：本文属于读写任务写作，动笔前，一定要认真阅读原文，并理解内容。认真看清题目要求，这篇书面表达给了一段材料：先要求以约30个词概括上文的主要内容，要求有很高的概括提炼的能力，要抓住文章的主题，再以约120个词写一篇短文，按照要点去表达，不能有遗漏，写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。写作时尽量使用自己会的单词、词组和句型，同时也要注意使用一些高级语法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮点说明】范文观点明确，有理有据，不乏好的短语和句子：focus one’s attention 专注，the key to success.成功的关键，intend to do打算做，An elephant was constantly disturbed by a restless fly, who asked the elephant about the secret of remaining calm.这句话用了定语从句， After reading the story, I was inspired by what the elephant said. 这句话用了宾语从句， This reminds me of what happened when I entered high school as a Senior One student. 这句话用了宾语从句，I was so excited to find that there were various student organizations and after-class activities intended for us students. 这句话用了so….that…，During the first term, I was attracted whenever there was a notice from a student group. 这句话用了让步状语从句，As a result, I didn’t spend enough time on my studies, nor could I settle down on my homework every day. 这句话用了倒装句， I have learned a lesson from this experience that one should focus on one thing at a time. 这句话用了同位语从句， Then I will give priority to what I will be doing and keep it up, trying to resist the temptation of other events.这句话用了现在分词做状语， I am fully aware that only when I have a clear and determined mind can I achieve my goal in the end.这句话也用了倒装句。
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