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【题目】最近模拟联合国项目（Model United Nations)在各中学和大学开展，学生参与讨论全球性话题，了解世界，锻炼能力，吸引了很多学生。假定你叫李华，你的朋友May所在学校的模联组织招纳新成员，她做了长时间准备，经过了笔试，但却在面试中被淘汰，近几天，她神情沮丧，不愿和人说话。请你就此写封信安慰并鼓励她，并适当地提出一些建议。

注意：1、词数100左右；

2、可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear May,

I am sorry to hear that you have failed in the interview of MUN and can’t be a member of it.

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Yours faithfully,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear May,

I am sorry to hear that you have failed in the interview of MUN and can’t be a member of it.

I have a clear mind that you have made sufficient preparations for it and frustrations hit you like waves. From my perspective, it’s no use feeling sad even if sorrow is inevitable. Instead, you should feel content on the ground that you have made every endeavor to prepare. Furthermore, being optimistic lays a solid foundation for next time.

With regard to relaxing yourself, going out is a good choice. Additionally, reflecting on yourself is an effective healer. By doing this, not only can you be bold, but you can gain valuable experience.

Be happy and I’ll always be with you.

Yours faithfully,

Li Hua

【解析】一篇合格的应试类英语作文，首要的是内容上满足题目中给出的所有要点，这也是各个分数等级的评分标准中第一个考察点。试题题目中明确给出了内容要点：对朋友面试模联组织淘汰表示安慰并鼓励她，并适当地提出一些建议，考生只要稍加注意，找到要点，并将每个要点写清楚，文章的基本分数就拿到了，更不至于跑题。此篇范文对写信目的部分描述得详尽到位，清楚的描述了问题并给予安慰，然后提出建议，最后总结。范文衔接连贯，运用了Furthermore、Additionally。

【亮点说明】高级词汇：make sufficient preparations for 、frustration、 on the ground that、As a result以及多样句型：非谓语结构From my perspective, it’s no use feeling sad even if 倒装句 not only can you be bold, but you can gain valuable experience..这些句子的运用也让文章增色不少。