Question

基础写作(满分15分)

2008年元月18日下午3点你校在学校礼堂举行了成人宣誓仪式。请以日记的方式记录仪式过程并谈谈自己的感想.

      

主       题	成长，责任
参 加 人 员	高三师生，全体学生家长
仪 式 程 序	1. 学生宣誓 2. 学生代表发言 （表达谢意，畅谈理想） 3. 教师和家长代表发言 （表示祝贺，寄予希望） 4. 各班学生表演节目

参考词汇:  成人仪式a grown-up ceremony  宣誓 make an oath

【写作内容】

1. 举行仪式的时间、地点；

2. 表格中的内容;

3. 你自己的感想。

【写作要求】

1. 必须扣紧题目的要求，用5个规范的英语句子组织成连贯的文章

2. 组织成连贯的短文，开头已经写好，不计入总句子数

【评分标准】

1.句子结构的准确性和复杂度

2. 短文内容的完整性和连贯性

        January 18th  Friday                                     Fine

Answer 1

January 18th  Friday                                     Fine

At 3:00 this afternoon, the teachers and students in Senior Three as well as our parents attended the grown-up ceremony held in the school hall, whose theme is “Growth and Responsibility”. First, we made an oath, and then a student, representing all of us, made a speech, showing our thanks to not only our parents but also our teachers and talking about our great ideals. After that, some teachers and parents offered us their congratulations and expressed their expectations for our future. Last, we watched wonderful performances put on by students from different classes. The ceremony was over, but it has made me well aware that I have grown up and I am supposed to shoulder the responsibility for our society.

解析:

日记要求时态多用过去式，写全要点：1. 举行仪式的时间、地点；2. 表格中的内容; 3. 你自己的感想；注意过渡，重点放在自己的感想上。