Question

【题目】假如你是高二学生李华，你的美国笔友Sam发e-mail询问你的暑假计划。请你用e-mail回复他，要点如下：

1. 到社区或福利院去做志愿服务；

2. 学习有关机器人的知识；

3. 和家人或朋友去旅游。

提示词：福利院Welfare House

注意：1. 词数100左右；

2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Sam,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Sam,

Nice to get your email. I’m glad to share with you my summer plan, which is expected to be delightful and meaningful.

The first part of my holiday will be devoted to the voluntary work, during which time I intend to visit the Welfare House to care for the orphans. In addition to finishing my homework, I’d like to bury myself in learning something more about the robot, which has long been my appetite since childhood. Finally, my holiday will end up with a family tour around Fujian Province, whose scenery is a feast for eyes.

Such is my summer plan. Would you mind telling me yours? I’m looking forward to your reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封电子邮件。

第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封电子邮件；美国笔友Sam发e-mail询问你的暑假计划，这里要用e-mail回复他。时态应为一般现在时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如： the voluntary work,visit the Welfare House，robot，tour等。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

【亮点说明】

范文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如 I’m glad to share with you my summer plan, which is expected to be delightful and meaningful.，The first part of my holiday will be devoted to the voluntary work, during which time I intend to visit the Welfare House to care for the orphans., I’d like to bury myself in learning something more about the robot, which has long been my appetite since childhood.全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。