Question

【题目】最近某高中拟开展以“校园拒绝零食”为主题的活动。假如你是该校学生会主席，请你以学生会的名义，参考下面的内容提示，给全校学生写一封倡议书。

内容提示： 1．描述吃零食的现象；

2．阐述吃零食的影响；

3．提出合理化的建议。

注意： 1．词数80-100，开头已为你写好(不计入总词数)。

2．参考词汇：snacks零食；phenomenon现象。

Dear fellow students,

There is a serious phenomenon in our school.

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Answer 1

【答案】

Dear fellow students,

There is a serious phenomenon in our school. We find many students will crowd in the school store to buy snacks after each class. Some students even eat snacks in class.

Eating snacks is a bad habit and is also a waste of money. In addition, most snacks are unhealthy food, for they contain too much fat and sugar. Eating snacks improperly may lead to fatness and illness. What is worse, some students throw the wrappers everywhere, which pollutes our campus.

Dear fellow students, we shouldn’t act like kids any more. We high school students should develop good habits. Remember that three regular meals a day as well as a balanced diet are essential for us. Let’s form good eating habits and say no to snacks!

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本文是提纲类写作，要点已给出，根据要点文章可分三段来写：第一段描述吃零食的现象；第二段阐述吃零食的影响；第三段提出合理化的建议，并总结全文。写作时可适当增加细节以使行文连贯同时要把所提示的点写全，语句通顺，同时要注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系。根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩。

【亮点说明】

本文是一篇倡议书，分两段，结构合理，内容齐全，文中使用高级句子。We find many students will crowd in the school store to buy snacks after each class.宾语从句用在句中；Eating snacks is a bad habit and is also a waste of money.动名词作主语；In addition，most snacks are unhealthy food，for they contain too much fat and sugar. for在这里是并列连词，意思是“因为”，引导并列句；some students throw the wrappers everywhere，which pollutes our campus.非限制性定语从句运用巧妙；We high school students should develop good habits.同位语堪称经典；另外，In addition，What is worse，的运用为文章增色添彩。