Question

【题目】假定你是李华，你的英国笔友Jack对中国的铁路很感兴趣，想乘坐火车旅行。请根据以下要点提示，写一封书信，介绍中国铁路系统。

1．火车类型：高铁（HSR）（G）（300km／h）；

动车（CRH）（D）（200km／h）；

快车（Express）（T／Z／K）（100km／h）；

2．火车优点：安全，可以观赏沿途风景，省钱。

注意：

1．词数100左右；

2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3．开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Jack,

I’m honoured that you show great interest in our trains.

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Jack,

I’m honoured that you show greal interest in our trains.Now we have three kinds of trains.The traditional one is the express train.which is slow but cheap,with etter K/T/Z marked on the ticket.Another one is CRH,running at the speed of 200 kilometers per hour,and you can see letter. However,the fastest train is HSR traveling up to 300 kilometers per hour.Their tickets are marked with letter G.

Traveling by train is safe over a long distance.Besides,you can see the beautiful scenery along the railway.It won’t cost you too much.

Looking forward to your visit to China!

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】本题是提纲类作文，文体是说明文。介绍中国铁路系统，要点包括：1．火车类型；2．火车优点。要点要全不能有遗漏和省略。要注意谋篇布局的顺序，本文使用一般现在时，描述要尽量选择简洁的语言，使用自己熟悉的句式，但尽可能地使句式多样化。

文章开头以一个从句引出本文的话题：I’m honoured that you show greal interest in our trains. 介绍火车的三种类型时，使用了由which引导的非限制性定语从句及过去分词作宾补： The traditional one is the express train. which is slow but cheap, with letter K/T/Z marked on the ticket. 接着用把两个单句连接，同时运用了由非谓语中的动词ing形式作定语; Another one is CRH,running at the speed of 200 kilometers per hour和the fastest train is HSR traveling up to 300 kilometers per hour。动词的ing形式作主语：Traveling by train is safe。一个被动语态：Their tickets are marked with letter G。恰当地运用的连词and，However,besides.

总之本文结构合理，层次清晰，行文连贯。运用了名词从句和定语从句，灵活地使用了非谓语我多种形式及被动语态。连词运用的也恰当，让文更有条理。