Question

【题目】假设你是李华，你从网上得知美国中学生Peter 要成立一个网上绘画俱乐部，你想加入。请根据以下要点给他发一封电子邮件：

1.说明消息来源和自己的意愿；

2.理由和打算；

3.希望获准。

注意：1.词数100左右（开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数）

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

Dear Peter,

I’m Li Hua, a middle school student from China_____________________________________________________

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

I’m Li Hua, a middle school student from China. Learning from the Internet that you’ll set up a painting club, I’d like to join it.

I have been deeply interested in painting since my childhood. Whenever there is a chance, I always try to paint pictures. As a saying goes, practice makes perfect. By practicing a lot, I’ve mastered some skills and I’ve been given quite a few awards in some contests. Joining the club, I’ll learn from other members and I’m convinced that my skills will be greatly improved. Additionally, I’ll make more friends in the club.

Please consider my request, and I’m looking forward to your early reply.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】本文属于提纲类作文，要求假设你是李华，你从网上得知美国中学生Peter 要成立一个网上绘画俱乐部，你想加入。请根据以下要点给他发一封电子邮件。要注意邮件的格式和特殊用词。要点：1.说明消息来源和自己的意愿；2.理由和打算；3.希望获准。

这篇文章对于考生的综合能力要求较高，要求考生有很强的谋篇布局的能力和组织要点的能力。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，一定要契合给出的开头，不能出现文章脱节问题。尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次。

【亮点说明】本篇书面表达要点全面，结构紧凑，是一篇较好的范文。这篇短文使用了大量的短语，为文章增色不少，如: set up建立，be interested in对……感兴趣。还使用了谚语practice makes perfect.熟能生巧；宾语从句Joining the club, I’ll learn from other members and I’m convinced that my skills will be greatly improved.等多种句式结构，增加了文章的可读性。