Question

10．假定你们学校英语报社征集以"我最感激的一位老师"为主题的英语作文，请你根据以下要点写一篇英语短文，谈谈你的某位老师．
要点：1．简要介绍这位老师；
   2．感激老师的理由；
   3．如何感激（如尊师重教，好好学习）．
注意：1．词数80左右；
   2．可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．

Answer 1

分析 本题为提纲类写作，以"我最感激的一位老师"为主题写一篇英语作文，写作要点：1．简要介绍这位老师；2．感激老师的理由；3．如何感激（如尊师重教，好好学习）．写作时以第一人称为主，时态以一般现在时为主要时态．
重点词汇：owe to（由于，归功于）；as well as （也，而且）；conversation（谈话）；encouraged sb to sth（鼓励某人干某事）；lucky（幸运的）
高分句型：1．He is of medium-height，but wears the warmest smile on his face，which melts all the hearts in my class．
which引导一个非限制性定语从句，关系代词which指代上文提到的内容．
2．Then he listened to me①talking about my depressions，my unhappiness and my disappointment，②like a friend listening to a friend．
①现在分词短语做伴随状语；②这里like是介词，介词短语在句中作状语．

解答 Everyone has a person he wants to say thank-you to in his deep heart．I owe my great gratitude to my maths teacher．
My maths teacher is a middle-aged man with a pair of glasses over his nose．He is of medium-height，but wears the warmest smile on his face，which melts all the hearts in my class（高分句型一）．In my eyes he is a devoted teacher as well as a good friend．
One day，I was very upset after getting the monthly exam result．He noticed this and asked me to go to his office．He began the conversation with his own high school experience．Then he listened to me talking about my depressions，my unhappiness and my disappointment，like a friend listening to a friend（高分句型二）．This made me feel at ease all at once．Finally，he encouraged me to keep on studying hard and have faith in myself．
Now，my maths has improved a lot thanks to his help．I feel so lucky to have such a teacher．

点评 提纲作文在写作时要注意要点的提炼要全，关键短语和句型要写对，准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，还要注意人称和时态使用要正确．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型使文章显得更有档次