Question

1．请你以Jane Goodall为题写一篇短文，词数120左右．内容要点如下：
1．著名的动物学家（zoologist）Jane Goodall，1934年出生于英国，毕业于剑桥（ Cambridge University） 大学．
2．她从小就梦想在自然环境中研究动物并于1960年去非洲研究黑猩猩（chimps）．
3．取得的成就：
1）在Jane Goodall 之前，没有人完全了解猩猩的行为：吃肉；一起狩猎；像家庭成员一样交流，生活；
2）帮助建立动物自然栖息地；
3）获得许多荣誉（ honours ）．
注意：不要逐字翻译，可以适当增加细节．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲类的作文，是以Jane Goodall为题写一篇短文，属于写人的英语作文，写作时根据具体要求不要逐句翻译，可适当增加细节以使行文连贯同时要把所提示的要点写全，语句通顺，同时注意准确运用时态、语态、上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系．根据句意适当使用并列连词，同时也要合理运用高级词汇和高级句子为文章增色添彩．
  亮点说明：Jane Goodall，born in England in 1934，was a world famous zoologist，who graduated from Cambridge University．句中运用非限制性定语从句；
       Since her childhood she had wanted to work with animals in their natural environment．过去完成时（本来想做某事）的使用非常经典；
     She found that chimps hunt and eat meat．She also discovered how chimps communicate with each other．连续两个宾语从句
   Having devoted all her time to studying chimps，Jane Goodall gained many honours．现在分词完成式做状语

解答 Jane Goodall，born in England in 1934，was a world famous zoologist，who graduated from Cambridge University．（高分句型）Since her childhood she had wanted to work with animals in their natural environment．（高分句型）In 1960，she achieved her dream-she arrived in Africa to study the chimps．
Nobody before Jane fully understood chimp behavior．She found that chimps hunt and eat meat．She also discovered how chimps communicate with each other．She argued that wild animals should be left in the wild．Thanks to her help，some special reserves have been set up，where chimps can live safely．（高分句型）
Having devoted all her time to studying chimps，Jane Goodall gained many honours．（高分句型）Her spirit inspires many people．

点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词，使文章流畅、通顺，并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感．（1）认真审题，确定体裁． （2）构思要点．根据题目要求，理解要表达的要点．设计好文章的层次段落，考虑所用时态、人称等，把要点串联起来，构成文章框架．（3）选词造句，避难选易．（4）认真检查，避免错误．仔细阅读全文，查找是否有错，注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误，句式是否正确．逻辑是否一致．