Question

【题目】 假定你是李华，计划寒假找份兼职工作。下面的招聘广引起了你的注意，请根据要点（箭头所指内容）写一封申请信。

注意：

1. 词数120左右；

2. 可适当增加细节使行文连贯；

3. 开头已经给出，不计入总词数。

Dear Mr. Smith,

I’ve read your advertisement for an assistant teacher for a children’s winter camp.

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】

Dear Mr. Smith,

I’ve read your advertisement for an assistant teacher for a children’s winter camp. I am quite interested in this position. I am outgoing, energetic, well-organized, and responsible; and most importantly, I love working with children! In the past two years, as a monitor in my class, I have proved myself to be an excellent helper to my teachers. I speak fluent English, which enables me to help native English teachers communicate freely and effectively with students in an English-only environment.

I will soon have a three-week winter vacation, so I have no problem working evenings and weekends. I can start working from the end of this month. I would be pleased to assist both the teachers and students in this challenging and rewarding environment.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

Dear Mr. Smith,

I’ve read your advertisement for an assistant teacher for a children’s winter camp. I’m very interested in this position and I think my personality and experience will qualify me for the job.

To begin with, I gain much experience of working with children from my part-time job as a babysitter. Besides, I have been a helpful assistant for both my English teacher and my classmates. More importantly, I can speak English fluently, which will help me work with native teachers from England. I will be available for the work on evenings and weekends and can start working from the end of this term. I would really appreciate it if you could give me this opportunity.

Looking forward to your early reply.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

试题分析：本篇书面表达属于书信类作文写作，也是一篇半开放性的作文，要点给出来的并不多，需要考生自行组织，自由发挥。根据题目要求可得知文章需要用第一人称来写。需要写的内容已经给出，但是写作时不要仅仅对要点进行生硬的翻译，而是要添加些内容，使文章看起来更充实，要组成一篇通顺连贯的短文。需要注意紧扣文章主题，给出的要点都需要包括，缺一不可。在写作时要注意使用高级的词汇与高级的句型，不要遗漏任何的要点，同时要使用合适的连接词来连接整个文章，使文章更有条理性。写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，要将这些内容在文中表达清楚。2、要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写。本文写作时要注意礼貌，不可太唐突。3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；就本文而言应该用一般现在时态。 4.注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点。

【亮点说明】本文结构紧凑，层次分明，而且使用了大量短语well-organized，have no problem，be pleased to等。此外，More importantly, I can speak English fluently, which will help me work with native teachers from England等从句也使文章增色不少。