Question

【题目】假设你是李华。请写信向外教Mr. Brown介绍你校新建的阳光健身中心，并邀请他周末一起来锻炼健身。内容包括：1.开放时间；2. 健身项目；3. 服务设施；

注意：1.词数100左右；开头已给，不计入总词数。

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯。

参考词汇：

阳光健身中心Sunshine Health Center； 有氧运动 aerobic exercise;

保龄球bowling； 专业的professional; 教练coach

Dear Mr. Brown,

I’m Li Hua. I’m writing to tell you something about our newly-built Sunshine Health Center.

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mr. Brown,

I’m Li Hua. I’m writing to tell you something about our newly-built Sunshine Health Center. I sincerely invite you to join me in taking exercise this weekend.

The center opens from 8:00 am to 9:00 pm and provides different physical exercises such as aerobic exercise, swimming and bowling. It’s equipped advanced and modern equipment, making it convenient and comfortable for sports fans. What I want to stress is that there are excellent coaches ready to help you, who can offer you professional guidance when you want to build up your body and keep fit.

Welcome to join me and enjoy a good time in the center this weekend? I’d appreciate it if you reply to me at your earliest convenience to let me know whether you will come or not.

Yours

Li Hua

【解析】

本篇书面表达属于应用文，要求写一封信。

第1步：根据提示可知，本篇为一封书信，假设你是李华。请写信向外教Mr. Brown介绍你校新建的阳光健身中心，并邀请他周末一起来锻炼健身。内容包括：1.开放时间；2. 健身项目；3. 服务设施。时态应为一般现在时。

第2步：根据写作要求，确定关键词（组），如：invite sb. to do sth.邀请某人做某事，physical exercises体育运动，convenient 方便的， comfortable舒适的，professional专业的， guidance指导，build up增强，keep fit保持（身体）健康，appreciate感谢。

第3步：根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致和时态问题。

第4步：连句成文，注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡，书写一定要规范清晰，保持整洁美观的卷面是非常重要的。

亮点说明：作者在范文中使用了较多高级表达方式，如：What I want to stress is that there are excellent coaches ready to help you, who can offer you professional guidance when you want to build up your body and keep fit. 主语从句和定语从句的运用；I’d appreciate it if you reply to me at your earliest convenience to let me know whether you will come or not.宾语从句的运用。本文内容完整，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当。另外全文中没有中国式英语的句式，显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外，文章思路清晰、层次分明，上下句转换自然，为文章增色添彩。