Question

14．假如你是李华，针对你市目前的交通堵塞问题，给市长写一封信，提出自己的建议．要点如下：
1．私家车增多和司机的违规行驶造成交通堵塞；
2．提出具体的解决办法；
3．希望市长予以答复．
注意：1．词数100左右；   2．可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯．
参考词汇：混乱chaos；车道lane；停车场parking lot
Dear Mayor，
I'm writing to give some suggestions to improve our city's transportation．
Dear Mayor，
I'm writing to give some suggestions to improve our city's transportation．
At present，traffic jams have become a major problem faced by most people of our city every day．（高分句型）The number of private cars has been increasing．What's more，some drivers disobey traffic rules，causing traffic chaos．（高分句型）All this often results in traffic jams．
In my opinion，measures must be taken to solve this problem．First，the government should encourage people to use public transport more and at the same time limit private cars．Second，more lanes and parking lots should be built．Third，it's important to educate the public to obey traffic rules．
I would appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into consideration．（高分句型）I'm looking forward to your reply．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 这是一篇提纲类作文．假如你是李华，针对你市目前的交通堵塞问题，给市长写一封信，提出自己的建议．要点如下：1．私家车增多和司机的违规行驶造成交通堵塞；2．提出具体的解决办法；
3．希望市长予以答复．需要写的内容已经粗略给出，需要我们翻译成完整通顺的句子，适当添加些内容，使文章更充实．写作时注意准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑关系，不能出现文章脱节问题．一定要给出自己的看法．尽量使用自己熟悉的单词句式，同时也要注意使用高级词汇和高级句型为文章润色．注意要求的词数100词左右，不要太多也不要太少．
【亮点说明】What's more，some drivers disobey traffic rules，causing traffic chaos．这里现在分词作结果状语．I would appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into consideration．这里的句型I would appreciate it if用的很好．

解答 One possible version：
Dear Mayor，
I'm writing to give some suggestions to improve our city's transportation．
At present，traffic jams have become a major problem faced by most people of our city every day．（高分句型）The number of private cars has been increasing．What's more，some drivers disobey traffic rules，causing traffic chaos．（高分句型）All this often results in traffic jams．
In my opinion，measures must be taken to solve this problem．First，the government should encourage people to use public transport more and at the same time limit private cars．Second，more lanes and parking lots should be built．Third，it's important to educate the public to obey traffic rules．
I would appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into consideration．（高分句型）I'm looking forward to your reply．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

点评 应该注意适当增加细节以使行文连贯，比如适当选用表示因果、递进、转折关系的连接词，使文章流畅、通顺，并避免因反复使用句式相同的简单句而造成的单调感．（1）认真审题，确定体裁． （2）构思要点．根据题目要求，理解要表达的要点．设计好文章的层次段落，考虑所用时态、人称等，把要点串联起来，构成文章框架．（3）选词造句，避难选易．（4）认真检查，避免错误．仔细阅读全文，查找是否有错，注意时态、单词拼写、字母大小写、标点是否有误，句式是否正确．逻辑是否一致．