Question

15．假设你是红星中学高三（1）班学生李华．最近你和同学组织了"文明使用共享单车"的活动，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，给校刊"英语角"写一篇稿件介绍你们的活动过程．注意：词数不少于60．
提示词：1．civilized 文明的
2．leaflets 宣传单

Recently，the increasing popularity of shared bikes has made our lives more convenient．However，my classmates and I often noticedsome shared bikesplaced messily everywhere．We felt upsetand decided to make a change to the uncivilizedbehavior．
First，we had a heated discussion about the problem at our class meeting．We shared our ideas and came up with a great plan．After making full preparations，we startedto take action．
On Saturday morning，we gathered outside the subway station near our school．Firstly，we began with those messy shared bikesthere and tried to put themin order．People passing by all appreciated what we did．Seeing the bikes in rows on the pavement，we really felt excited．Then，in order to encourage people's civilized behavior，weput upa poster saying"PLEASE BE CIVILIZED WHILE USING A SHARED BIKE"．Meanwhile，some of us helped to give out leaflets．Of course，we drew much attention from the passers-by．Hopefully our action would make a difference．
This experience actually inspires me a lot．The idea of sharing requires people's awareness of civilization．When the uncivilized behavior occurs，it is our duty to do our best to stop it．I strongly believe that in this way our society will become better and better．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇书面表达属于图画类作文，根据提示信息最近你和同学组织了"文明使用共享单车"的活动，请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，给校刊"英语角"写一篇稿件介绍你们的活动过程．写作时注意以下几点：1、仔细阅读有关提示，弄清试题提供的所有信息，2、要依据提示情景或词语，按照一定逻辑关系来写．本文写作时可以按照所给的顺序写．3、根据要表达的内容确定句子的时态、语态；4．注意使用高级词汇和句式，以增加文章的亮点．
（高分句型一）my classmates and I often noticed some shared bikes placed messily everywhere．
该句使用了notice sth done结构，看到…被…看到共享单车被放的论七八糟‘'
（高分句型二）Seeing the bikes in rows on the pavement，we really felt excited．
seeing是非谓语结构，即现在分词做状语，和句子的主语we是主动关系；
高级词汇：came up with提出；take action采取行动；it is our duty to…做某事是我们的职责…

解答 Recently，the increasing popularity of shared bikes has made our lives more convenient．However，（高分句型一）my classmates and I often noticed some shared bikes placed messily everywhere．（图一内容）We felt upset and decided to make a change to the uncivilized behavior．
    First，（图二内容）we had a heated discussion about the problem at our class meeting．We shared our ideas and came up with a great plan．After making full preparations，we started to take action．
    On Saturday morning，we gathered outside the subway station near our school．Firstly，（图三内容）we began with those messy shared bikes there and tried to put them in order．People passing by all appreciated what we did．（高分句型二）Seeing the bikes in rows on the pavement，we really felt excited．Then，in order to encourage people's civilized behavior，（图四内容）we put up a poster saying"PLEASE BE CIVILIZED WHILE USING A SHARED BIKE"．Meanwhile，some of us helped to give out leaflets．Of course，we drew much attention from the passers-by．Hopefully our action would make a difference．
    This experience actually inspires me a lot．The idea of sharing requires people's awareness of civilization．When the uncivilized behavior occurs，it is our duty to do our best to stop it．I strongly believe that in this way our society will become better and better．

点评 这类文章书写时，需要做到脉络清晰，并且观点明确，理由得当．首先审题，明白文章的话题主要是什么，也就是整篇文章的中心，其次就是要抓住题目给出的主要内容，这也就是给文章的主要脉络进行了定格，所以这类文章在书写时，对于预言逻辑能力的运用能力，词汇和句型的使用能力，文章连接的高要求较高，同时学生在书写时，对于字数也要进行适当的控制．