Question

【题目】假如你叫李华，最近你的美国笔友Tony要来北京体验中国传统文化，请根据他的问题回复邮件，为他设计北京一日游活动，帮助他体验中国传统文化。请描述你们打算去的地方、具体的活动安排、以及这样安排的理由。

提示词语：traditional Chinese culture, tea house, Peking Opera, paper cutting

注意：1：词数100左右。

2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

3.开头和结束语已为你写好，不计入总词数。

Hi, Tony!

I’m glad that you will come to Beijing soon.____________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________________________

I’m looking forward to your coming.

Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Hi, Tony!

I’m glad that you will come to Beijing soon. There are lots of places of interest in Beijing. In order to experience traditional Chinese culture better, I do recommend Beijing Hutong tour.

First, we’re going to go sightseeing along the lanes in Hutong. The houses in Hutong are traditional, such as Siheyuan. From them, you can imagine how people used to live. Of course you can stop anywhere you like and it is interesting to take pictures or have a close look. Second, we are going to pay visits to a Hutong family. We can have lunch there and have a short talk with the local residents, which can help you learn about many stories of the past. We can not only appreciate the dramatic changes that Hutong has undergone, but also see evidence of the history of Beijing, experience the old way of life and experience traditional Beijing culture.

In a word, Hutongs are the homes of common people in the past. It is easy to know how people lived and had fun in the old days. So it is a good choice to learn about traditional Chinese culture.

I’m looking forward to your coming.

【解析】这是一篇命题作文。文章主要内容已经给出。考生在写这篇文章时，要注意以下几点：1. 以将来时和一般现在时为主。2. 要点要齐全，不能少写漏写。但也不要对要点进行简单的罗列。可以使用适当的连接词，使行文流畅，衔接自然。3. 注意文章要以书信的形式进行叙述，一定要采用必要的句子作为支撑。否则会显得内容不够丰满，语气不够委婉。

【范文亮点】

1.文章采用了“I’m glad that...很高兴...”“In order to ... better, I do...为了更好地...我...”“It is easy to know...不难知道...”等高分句式。

2.文章运用了“places of interest名胜古迹”“have a close look近距离观看”“pay visits to...参观...”“dramatic changes显著变化”“not only...but also不仅...而且”等加分词组。

3.运用了“First，Second,In a word...”等逻辑词，使文章思路清晰，要点明确。

4.“We can have lunch there and have a short talk with the local residents, which can help you learn about many stories of the past.”which引导非限制性定语从句，其中which代指前面的整个句子。

5.“We can not only appreciate the dramatic changes that Hutong has undergone, but also see evidence of the history of Beijing, experience the old way of life and experience traditional Beijing culture.我们不仅可以欣赏胡同经历的巨大变化，而且可以看到北京历史的证据，体会旧的生活方式，体验传统的北京文化。”这是一个复杂句型，“appreciate、see、experience”几个谓语动词并列，形成排比，大大提升了文章的气势。