2.误点点拨：①处改为：because he is very tall and has a beard.连接词and前后的句式应一致，而且because后面只能接句子。

　　　　　　 ②处改为given the opportunity。given和we形成被动关系,所以用过去分词。

　　　　　　 ③处改为it’s no wonder that...，为固定句型，“难怪……”。

1.总体评价：本文叙述全面，抓住了教师的外表，个人的独特风格等各要素，并使用了较多的词汇、短语和句型。如make his class full of laughter, make a joke, in the lowest spirits, rely on, lend encouragement to等，还有非限制性定语从句，被动句等各种从句的使用。文章也运用了恰当的连词，如but, in addition, so等，使得文章比较连贯。虽然也有些错误，但仍然可以判为第四档。

2.　　 记述他的一些与众不同的地方。

要求：字数 150左右，可以适当展开想象。　 参考词汇： 激发 motivate

[学生习作]

Mr. Green is only several years older than us. He is considered very special not just(-2分)① because of his beard and he is very tall, but because of his ways of teaching. He is able to make his class full of laughter throughout the class, which brings him another name, Magician. For example, he often surprises us by making a joke or singing a song and so on. In addition, he always lends warm encouragement to us. Even those in the lowest spirits can be motivated by him, just because he believes we could do it, (-2分)②giving the opportunity. So (-2分)③there’s no wonder that he is regarded as a friend whom we can rely on anytime.(得分档次：第四档19分)

[习作评析]

1.　　 简要描述他的外貌。

5.请根据以下四幅图(小华一天的经历)和提示词，以Virtue of Helping Others为题，用英语写一篇150字左右的短文，主要内容为：

1)　 图中小华助人为乐的行为；2)你对助人为乐的看法。

写人记事类：

写人记事一方面要注重人物的肖像、语言和行为细节描写，另外一方面要注意选材，弄清主次。常见段落结构：主题句－发展句－结论句。

[例题体验]

你们学校的英语校报最近新开设了一个“My favorite teacher”栏目，而你的英语老师Mr. Green虽然很年轻，但教学方法很独特，而且善于激发大家的意志。请你根据下列要点为这个栏目写一篇关于他的文章。

2.误点点拨：①receive改为received。其它时态错误有：Some of us offer the drivers…；…teaching them English who are so absorbed in our teaching；Some of us clean…。这些句子里的谓语动词均应改为一般过去时。

　　　　　 ②we separated改为we are separated。语态错误，应该被动语态。

[范文]

　Tuesday, March 5, 2002　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　 　　　　　　　　Fine

Thirty-eight years ago, the late Chairman Mao called on us to learn from Lei Feng. To mark the occasion, we organized an activity at a nearby bus station today.

At 8 o'clock in the morning, we arrived at the 712 bus station, where we were warmly welcomed by the drivers and conductors.

Then we broke up into several groups. Some of us taught some drivers and conductors English, while others cleaned the buses. Still others directed traffic at the crossroads near the bus station and helped the elderly cross the street.

Staff members of the bus station and our classmates then took part in a general knowledge quiz on the Olympic Games in the afternoon, which was great fun for both sides. Around four o'clock, we said goodbye to one another, and felt very happy on the way home.

Today's activity has taught us the new meaning of the spirit of Lei Feng: Sharing with others what you have-your time, energy, or knowledge-makes you feel warm in your heart. It has truly made a difference in how I feel about myself.

[即学即练]

1.总体评价:作为学生日记，这篇文章存在不少错误。首先，日记是记述已经发生了的事情，动词时态应该用过去时(-3分)；其次，有些句子使用不当，下面将具体更正。不过文章结构合理，语言通顺、连贯，因此文章按第四档给分。

4. 叙事角度：记叙文通常采用第一人称或第三人称两个角度来进行阐述。第一人称叙事角度是指以当事人的口吻叙述人物或事件。第三人称叙事角度是指以第三人称的身份来客观叙述人物或事件。不管用那种人称，全文必须一致。

基于近年来的常考题型，本部分将分为：图画类，写人记事类

图画类：

图画作文要求图画所提供的信息叙述一件事或阐述图画中反映的某种社会现象。图画作文的写作步骤可以概括为：审题(把握主旨，文体，人称等)；列出要点，选好词句；连句成篇，适当发挥；查漏勘误，规范誊写。

[真题体验]

(2002年北京春季招生卷)为了响应38年前毛主席提出的“向雷锋同志学习”的号召，配合北京迎“奥运”宣传活动，光明中学组织了一次到某汽车站的学雷锋活动。请根据以下6幅图画，用英语写一篇日记。

注意：1．词数100左右； 2．日记的开头与结尾已为你写好；3.生词：奥运知识竞赛：general knowledge quiz on the Olympic Games

　Tuesday, March 5, 2002　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　Fine

Thirty-eight years ago, the late Chairman Mao called on us to learn from Lei Feng. To mark the occasion, we organized an activity at a nearby bus station today.

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Today's activity has taught us the new meaning of the spirit of Lei Feng: Sharing with others what you have - your time, energy, or knowledge - makes you feel warm in your heart. It has truly made a difference in how I feel about myself.

[学生习作]

　Tuesday, March 5, 2002　　 　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　Fine

Thirty-eight years ago, the late Chairman Mao called on us to learn from Lei Feng. To mark the occasion, we organized an activity at a nearby bus station today.

　　 At 8 o'clock in the morning, we reached the 712 bus station. To our joy, we ①(-2分)receive a warm welcome. Then ②(-2分)we separated into different groups. Some of us offer the drivers books and magazines, teaching them English who are so absorbed in our teaching. Some of us clean the buses very carefully. In addition, some acted as traffic policemen directing traffic during rush hours and helped the elderly cross the street.

　　 　Later, the workers of the bus station held a general knowledge quiz on the Olympic Games with us. What great fun it is when all of us expressed our ideas actively. Time flied! Around four o'clock, we had to say good bye to the workers, but we feel so glad on the way home.

Today's activity has taught us the new meaning of the spirit of Lei Feng: Sharing with others what you have - your time, energy, or knowledge - makes you feel warm in your heart. It has truly made a difference in how I feel about myself.(按第四档给分：19分)

[习作评析]

3. 适当使用连接词。

2. 多用动词, 尤其是动态性强的行为动词是英语记叙文的又一个明显的语言特点。